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Tavia's avatar

Late night cards for two

faint and far away a hoot

great horned owl - no. Two.

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Amie Ko Chuang's avatar

Kit Kat by Julia (8 years old)

Kit Kat is candy

it is sweet, crunchy, and brown

It tastes very sweet

The Bird by Lana (10 years old)

In the green, green trees

A little head peeps out there

Oh! It is a bird

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

Lana, I love the surprise of your last line!

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Amie Ko Chuang's avatar

The girls are always delighted when I read your comments to them. Thank you, Lorrie!

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

Not as much as I am delighted in reading their poems and yours. ♥️

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

Julia, the sounds of the words Kit Kat together are delicious themselves!

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

Driving to My Parent’s House

freeway billboards flash

stories inside every card

the miles seem long

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

The second line is supposed to be stories inside every car--whoops!

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Katie Chan's avatar

By eight year old Ellie:

Title: Beachtime

When people see waves,

they run, run, run fast to the beach,

to feel the sun’s warmth

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

My family is together and we’re driving to my parent’s house. I read this one aloud to everyone in the car. My niece loves the beach! 🏖️ we loved it.

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McCollonough Ceili's avatar

Aww how cute. I love it when the wee ones write.

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

So true Ceili.

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McCollonough Ceili's avatar

Upon an ancient grave* a baby plays.

Dark walls of earth

Holds memories

Forgotten by many

Lived centuries before

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McCollonough Ceili's avatar

I think I need to work on this one a bit. Does anyone have any suggestions?

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

What’s your gut telling you, Ceili? Have you read this aloud to yourself?

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Lorrie Tom's avatar

Reading aloud helps me so much! I often hear what I need to change or at least a spot that might need work even if I don’t know what to do. I forget to read my writing aloud a lot still! I also have to learn to trust my gut!

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McCollonough Ceili's avatar

Thanks for the suggestion just edited it.

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